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 Post subject: 4109 A.D. Disc thread
PostPosted: Wed Dec 08, 2010 4:43 pm 
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Ask me about anything about the story or make suggestions!

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 Post subject: Re: 4109 A.D. Disc thread
PostPosted: Wed Dec 08, 2010 6:06 pm 
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So far it has been great; keep up the good work! :)

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 Post subject: Re: 4109 A.D. Disc thread
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Thanks Napoleon! :)

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 Post subject: Re: 4109 A.D. Disc thread
PostPosted: Thu Dec 09, 2010 6:45 pm 
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For your information guys, here is the back story of 4109...

The Aliens are from Saturn they came here because an asteriod hit Saturn and made it uninhabitable for them. And they got to Earth cuz' Saturn's "Un-orbiting" brought it within three days journey of Earth. So they attacked and tried to conquer. But us "Puny Humans" put up a fight. So hence the story.

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 Post subject: Re: 4109 A.D. Disc thread
PostPosted: Thu Dec 09, 2010 7:09 pm 
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I like it. :D

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 Post subject: Re: 4109 A.D. Disc thread
PostPosted: Thu Dec 09, 2010 7:21 pm 
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Great chapter!

One thing:

"AAARRRGGHH!!" A medic ran up and inspected Dave's shoulder. "It was a energy sting, it should heal."
"It hurts like the Dickens!"
"Sit still sir, I'm going to fix your arm."
"What is your name and rank man?"
"Corporal Ron Hill sir. Now bite down on this, that's it..."

I don't want to seem like I'm trying to find mistakes, but it would look better like so:

"AAARRRGGHH!!" A medic ran up and inspected Dave's shoulder. "It was a energy sting, it should heal."

"It hurts like the Dickens!"

"Sit still sir, I'm going to fix your arm."

"What is your name and rank man?"

"Corporal Ron Hill sir. Now bite down on this, that's it..."

It makes it easier to tell who's talking.

Hope I helped! ;)

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 Post subject: Re: 4109 A.D. Disc thread
PostPosted: Thu Dec 09, 2010 7:22 pm 
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I'm glad. I am very happy! :} :)

You shure' did help!

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 Post subject: Re: 4109 A.D. Disc thread
PostPosted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 5:46 pm 
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Here are some random American soldiers from the story:

http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/khope ... ldiers.jpg

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 Post subject: Re: 4109 A.D. Disc thread
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khopesh97 wrote:
Here are some random American soldiers from the story:

http://www.brickshelf.com/gallery/khope ... ldiers.jpg

Enjoy!


They look pretty neat, although, for a couple thousand years in the future, they don't look too much more advanced than what we have now. I guess really it's the helmets. Perhaps a more sci-fi looking helmet would be better. Perhaps black or gray motorcycle helmets with black visors would be better. Just my opinion though; you can make 'em however ya like. :)

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 Post subject: Re: 4109 A.D. Disc thread
PostPosted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 7:49 pm 
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Cool minifigs! I agree with what Napoleon said though.

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